If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that we living in the real world and in realistic view a good opportunity do not happen a lot and in this case, it is very important that persons make a correct and reasonable decision. Because our imaging about our favorite job or a fantastic life does not occur in the real world. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that never people forget their fantasy and their actual aims in their life because this issue creates very bad memories in their mind and can be threatened their healthy of mind. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that we should not be lost a good and secure job position because it could not quite be satisfying ours.
First and foremost, we never can find a job position which has all of our favorite factors. Today, we live in a very competitive job condition and a wonderful job need a lot number of different ability and silks and experience. Surely, we cannot achieve this mentioned requirements just through waiting. While through getting the available job we obtain very great chance to increase our knowledge and required the ability for development. In addition, the only academic degree is not enough for getting a good job and we need to obtain several related job experience to obtaining practical experience.
in another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that non-activity and waiting home without any responsibility after sometimes can be led to decreased person interest in working and prone to the underdog. Furthermore, the psychologist believes that the possibility of depression in this people are very higher than the second group. Certainly, if we do not use from our knowledge in the jobs during the time this information become weak on our brain. And this condition provides a horrible situation for the person.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that we should not ever be lost our opportunity for success because of hope to better propose, because of mentally healthy and real condition of our society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 690, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...job position because it could not quite be satisfying ours. First and foremost, we never c...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...e to obtaining practical experience. in another significant fact, that should b...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s that the possibility of depression in this people are very higher than the second ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, so, still, while, in addition, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90934844193 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71941689964 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538243626062 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.3956906581 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.785714286 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206113314886 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760237622208 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464891213613 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123755951834 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290845056458 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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