The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

The given line graph depict the percentage of hexagenarian and above aged population in different countries in given interval of time.
At a glance, it is observed that the striking factor being the trend of overall enhancement in proportion. In 1940, only 5% of the population was hexagenarian in Japan. Whereas 7% and 9% proportion of Sweden and America. In following 40 years, dipped was measured up to 3% in population of Japan. Where is the hexagenarian population of the sweden and America was double of the population of Japan with proportion of 9% and 11% respectively. In 2000, Sweden surpass the population of America at the 14% and gradually rises up to 20% in 2010. In 2027, proliferation will be measured in population of Japan and will gradually rise up to 25% from 10%. On other hand, population of Sweden and America will gradually Rises with same proportion up to 25% with the difference of 2% between them.
In the nutshell, hexagenarian population of Japan gain momentum from lower percentage to highest percentage. On other hand, proportion of Sweden and America remain same throughout the given century

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 458, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Sweden) must be used with a third-person verb: 'surpasses'.
Suggestion: surpasses
...% and 11% respectively. In 2000, Sweden surpass the population of America at the 14% an...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 712, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'rise'
Suggestion: Rise
...on of Sweden and America will gradually Rises with same proportion up to 25% with the...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the highest'.
Suggestion: to the highest
...pan gain momentum from lower percentage to highest percentage. On other hand, proportion o...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 3.97073170732 428% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 938.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98936170213 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01574636208 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473404255319 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2792200592 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2727272727 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0909090909 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.23603664747 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187011386142 0.215688989381 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792752041034 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573201489237 0.0843802449381 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13521925955 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572246392737 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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