It is important for school children to study music, art, and sports as it is for them to become literate and numerate. How far do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.
Recently, the phenomenon of studying music, art and sport and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many the matter of its importance is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that sports, music can create enormous entertainment and learning them can be a plus, and I will discuss that throughout this essay.
On the one hand, learning sports and music or any art make the children more confident and make them mentally and physically healthy. Based on my personal experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered children who are not doing well in their study and not able to get high grades can settle their career into their passion like music, art or sports. Thus, beneficial ramifications of studying music, art, and sports apparently can be seen.
On the other hand, immersing the kids in risky sports can lead to severe injuries which might increase the consequences of being absent at school. Being away from school can have a negative impact on children's learning and may overall cause some developmental delays to become more numerate and literate. As per the scientific research, kids with injury decreases their full potential to advance their skills. Thus, schools should eliminate these unsafe and hazardous sports for kids.
To conclude, the merits of learning music, art or sports which help to develop an overall intellectual personality outweigh its demerits. Thus, I profoundly believe that studying these at school should be considered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'delays becoming'.
Suggestion: delays becoming
...nd may overall cause some developmental delays to become more numerate and literate. As per the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, may, so, thus, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 8.36945812808 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 31.9359605911 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1207.87684729 116% => OK
No of words: 264.0 242.827586207 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29924242424 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85508332689 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 139.433497537 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632575757576 0.580463131201 109% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 379.143842365 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6992082998 50.4703680194 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.583333333 104.977214359 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.9669160288 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.25397266985 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201380614627 0.242375264174 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074096983961 0.0925447433944 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306966752424 0.071462118173 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116402217609 0.151781067708 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254622330349 0.0609392437508 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 12.6369458128 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 11.5310837438 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 55.0591133005 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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