Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
I believe that helping our community is everyone's responsibility. Even though, some people spend adequete time to helping their community, as far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the statement. In the following discussion, I would like to address some evidence to substantiate my point of view.
First of all, teenagers spend most of their time on other thing such as social media, college degree, and internet. Teenagers nowadays live in a environment that is exposed to high technology,which means every one has smartphones and social platform accounts. It takes so much time to explore others profile, chat with others,etc. My daily experience illustrates vividly that point. I spend almost eight hours on Facebook, Instagram, Youtube, Twitter, Snapchat, etc. Since it takes so much time to be active in social world, we do not have sufficient time to help our community.
Secondly, there are more and more people every single day. Since competitiveness incresses rapidly with the population growth, everyone wants to be more competitive in this society. Which basically means they do not want to waste time on things that they think useless. For instance, when I graduate my high school, my school principle asked us to plant trees on the school garden. At the same time, everyone strived for the better grade that they could enroll the university they want. As a result, no one planted trees and our school principle was very dissappointed.
In sum, given the factors I outlined above, we may reach the conclusion that teenagers does not give enough attention to their communities, because of wasting time on social media and not having enough time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 273.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12454212454 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85050416865 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630036630037 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4720208122 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4375 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0625 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264518031951 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691827744254 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733897817357 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156505606066 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600463276115 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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