In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details
The world has really advanced in terms of technology. And we can say that nothing is impossible anymore. The life today is completely different than the past in all aspects, including the medicine. Due to the invention in the medicine we have treatment even for incurable illnesses.
First, Access to medical services is easy today. During emergency, people have numerous options to get immediate help. They can contact a helpline number in urgency so that help is provided from a nearby hospital as early as possible. Mobile hospital is another innovation in medicine especially for the rural areas. Also, road connectivity is improved due to technological advancement and we can travel around city for aid whenever needed. Moreover, developments in science and technology have done a lot to strengthen our day to day lives. Newly discovered pharmaceuticals and medical devices assist doctors in a wide range of ways. They help in the prevention of illness, in the diagnosis of disease, during treatment and even in the provision of follow-up care. For example, several decades ago, my uncle passed away because of prostate cancer. He was eventually diagnosed with cancer, but it was not early enough to save his life. This was because there was simply no technology available to make the diagnosis. Recent research data conclude that survival rate in the early stage of the prostate cancer is a ninety-percent.
Secondly, people care more about their own health and realized the significance of exercises in their lives. Every morning you see people doing sports outside. More and more people have realized the saying "Life is locomotion". Regular sports build up a strong body. Sports like hiking, jogging, and swimming can all benefit our health. Naturally, people with stronger body could resist more diseases, and therefore can live longer. Similarly, stress is the greatest factor which can cause various disorder in our body which might later lead us to sickness. Compare to past, people today have much more manageable working life. Workers today enjoy both long vacation periods every year and fewer hours at work each day so they have much less stress. Additionally, they do various activities that help them to ease their stress, like meditation, breathing exercise, yoga, etc.
In a nutshell, the evolution of our society is the reason why people live a longer life now. People have access to better medical services. And people spend more time on sports and exercises to build stronger bodies. As we could predict, people are going to live even longer in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16587677725 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72106436538 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594786729858 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9270129402 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.6666666667 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0666666667 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36666666667 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124881117753 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323984764807 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586185020637 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895085301333 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991308912822 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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