Do you agree or disagree?
The opinion of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people then they are to older people.
Throughout history, people follow their interest celebrities. They almost are popular because of some properties or achievements such as their body, beauty, artistic acting, obtained medals in various competition etc. This would be raise a question to how much their opinions would be important for young people and older ones. So, from my perspective, the opinion of famous people has a great effect on young people than older ones. Of the countless reasons and examples, I will present the most essential and conspicuous ones here.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is the attraction of celebrities’ achievements and popularity on young people which is lead to follow their opinions as honors. Young people, therefore, attempt to dress the same as their honors, changing their lifestyle, behavior even their goals and ambitions in the celebrities’ way. However, when they become older it seems to less important to them as when are young. For example, when I was 13 I was so interested to follow Golzar who was the famous guitarist. I remembered, I always listened to his tracks again and again and tried to mimic what he did.
Furthermore, the importance of celebrities and their opinion is less for people when they become older because they should find their own lifestyle, job, education and so on, thus, they have no much free time to follow another person's opinion. However, celebrities lives are interesting for every. As a result of this fact, older people have less attention to celebrities than young people and teenagers. A recent survey has been conducted at the University of Stanford on tens of thousand people demonstrate that attraction of celebrities less approximately 80 percent as people become older.
Last but not least, young people attract to know celebrities' opinions for their interest in fame. In fact, children always interested to be famous among their family and friends. They always try to do what brings them older people’s admiration. When they become younger they interest to be popular in the larger commodity like among the people of their town, country or even worlds. Thus, they try to do as the same as famous people to lead us them to popularity, as follow the celebrities opinion and what they do.
In conclusion, I strongly assert that the opinions of celebrities are most important to young people than older ones for their interest in fame and less experience in life. In fact, they don't meet their challenges and reality of their lives, so that, follow some attractive world event and people like celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10613207547 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81942035549 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469339622642 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5598875563 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246100159443 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891107547204 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061803390556 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165620219228 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484976791723 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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