TOEFL TPO 40- Integrated Writing Task
Both the author and the lecturer discuss possibility of permanent human presence on Venus. The author propose the idea that there is some conditions on Venus, which make it inhospitable. However, the lecturer gives the idea that the human’s station on Venus could be placed in about fifty kilometers above the surface. Moreover, he casts some serious doubt on this notion and provides a number of counter-arguments in response.
To begin with, the author stated that the atmospheric pressure at Venus is extremely greater than the pressure at Earth's surface. It is about 100 Kilograms on every square centimeter of surface. In this way, anything will be crushed there. On the contrary, the lecturer clarifies that in fifty kilometers above Venus' surface the pressure is like normal pressure on Earth.
Moreover, the reading and the lecture were ar odds in another point. The reading put forward the idea that there are no reservoirs of water on Venus' surface. Also, the atmosphere is lack of sufficient oxygen. Therefore, water and oxygen must supplied from Earth. However, the lecturer asserts that, in the Venus' atmosphere there is compounds like carbon dioxide, which could be turned to water and oxygen by some chemical mechanisms.
Finally, the writer of the article explained the last reason, which was little sunlight receives on the Venus' surface. The writer asserts that about 60 percent of the light reflected by the clouds and much of remained can not get through dense layer of carbon dioxide. Yet again, the lecturer repudiates this one too. As he says, clouds already exists in above fifty kilometer over the surface. But these clouds are not as thick as clouds that writer mentions. Also, solar panels could receive the energy of reflected light.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'proposes'.
Suggestion: proposes
...ent human presence on Venus. The author propose the idea that there is some conditions ...
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Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some conditions'?
Suggestion: there are some conditions
...Venus. The author propose the idea that there is some conditions on Venus, which make it inhospitable. H...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are compounds'?
Suggestion: there are compounds
...r asserts that, in the Venus atmosphere there is compounds like carbon dioxide, which could be tur...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...s, clouds already exists in above fifty kilometer over the surface. But these clouds are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13103448276 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56636989909 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531034482759 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8714169112 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3157894737 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 7.06452816374 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414775059116 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118936502924 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705744890395 0.0662205650399 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2443141405 0.162205337803 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421899052071 0.0443174109184 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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