Young people enjoy their life more than older people? do you agree or disagree?
All of us begin his life from an innocent baby, know his parents and recognize their voices just. But when we become bigger we will immerse ourselves more with society to learn new things, in every moment we pass or fall we enjoy to push up ourselves toward the new days. we pass in three levels starting from childhood to become dependent young to end up in old age. many people agree that young enjoy more than older in their life and many agree to the reverse situation. personally, I believe that young people enjoy their life more than older. I feel this way for two mean reasons, Which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, young people have a strong physical body, at this age, they have the highest muscular power as the research showed. I think this issue plays a vital rule in their enduring ability to this hard life, so they can work hard without any giving up. Also, their intellectual level is full of power, so their ability to learn new things will be amazing. Their active brain active can solve many problems and come up with many advantages solution to society and may raise their marks or attitudes in their studying. I want to give an example of my hero man, my dad, he always told me about his young stage, when he was studying Aeronautical Engineering ,he was one of the pioneer who always getting high marks, beside this he was working in a company for three days in week in an airport for 8 hours to help his parent financially, also my dad got patent for creating new engine that it is used now in many airplanes like A322.,this engine make a breakthrough because he solves the fuel consuming problem. This power when he was young but now he is sick and can not do any hard work, but he stills my hero.
Secondly, I think that the young have more self-motivation to trigger them self to try and know everything new. this young soul will be calm and wiser when they become older. The young always try to make their decisions alone to see the results even if it will be bad, they tend to increase their experiment with a good soul can carry the difficult and easy consequences. the older cannot stand and face any problem or sadness that this may cause health problems or disease like diabetes. Supporting example for this, the young always like to try some adventurous sport like cars racing, they drive in high-speed to win just in meaningless reward, but this means to them a challenge to try and win in the new thing.
In conclusion, even that many people think that older people have more experience and they are wiser in their decisions, I strongly believe that young people enjoy in their life more than older, because of their physical and healthy ability, also because of their self-motivation they have in their soul.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53093812375 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34332187412 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497005988024 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.442354944 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.111111111 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8333333333 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327711578299 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131377718571 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178491546261 0.0737576698707 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24917323414 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148733157438 0.0645574589148 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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