Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Travelling the world is one of the greatest experiences that life has to offer; it changes your perspective in a good way and makes you a better person. When you are planning for a long trip far away from home one will need a big luggage filled with all kinds of stuff; nonetheless, if I had to choose to take one more thing, except for the necessary ones, I would definitely take my phone. This is due to two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, with phone I will be able to call my loved ones. Sometimes people decide to travel in order to rewind and take a break from their dull routine; however, this does not mean that they need to completely separate from their life and not talk to family or friends while travelling. Moreover, people are social creatures thus they need to constantly spend time or be around others. Even though speaking through phone is not the best choice to communicate, it is still better than being completely alone. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, I went to United States of America to work and travel; while I was there the only thing that kept me in touch constantly with my parents, my brothers, and my friends was the phone. Therefore, if it was not for my phone, my time abroad would not have been a good experience.
Second, through phone you have access to unbelievably large amounts of information: internet, books, social media, and whatnot. From time to time, although, I am visiting lots of different places, I would feel the need to use internet and see what is happening back in my hometown or in the world in general; moreover, as a huge fan of soccer, I would want to watch my favorite team play, or at least look at the score after the match. In addition, before going to sleep after a long day of hiking or walking, a movie or a tv show episode while laying on the bed, which by the way is outside in balcony, would be amazing. As a consequence, having my phone with me and use it occasionally throughout the day while travelling the world, would be a superb experience.
In conclusion, there are a lot of things I would love to take with me that would help a lot, but because I need to keep in touch with my loved ones and see what is happening around our planet, I would take my phone with me.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as to, at least, except for, in addition, in conclusion, in general, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40515222482 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49486306477 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.6878868099 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.4 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4666666667 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7333333333 5.45110844103 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200177339079 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649415231288 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720725064853 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144276430702 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101431170476 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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