The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph depicts information about the variations in the birth rates of china and usa from 1020 to 2000.

In an overviee it can be noticed that the percentages of birth rates in both the countries has decreased in the final year as compared to the initial year.

As can be seen from the figure that, in the year 1922, the rate of birth in usa was 12% which decreased gradually to 6% in 2000, although it reaches at its peak level of 20% in 1950, a decline of about half of the initial rate in 9 decades.

On the other hand, china whose birth rate was about 10% in the initial year halved to 5% in the year 1940 and tend to stabilize till 1945, then the rate rocketed and reached the highest level of 20% in 1950 . After that time, trend slumped to around 8% in 1958 and then started to drop minimally and reached to 3% in the final year.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 689.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2012195122 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12294301674 2.65546596893 80% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542682926829 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 196.2 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.2011952049 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.8 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8 22.9334400587 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172708470307 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110672097229 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895366702952 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132835901005 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826852510913 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.84 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.67 11.4140731707 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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