"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter above a shop owner states that it is his belief that an increased number of skateboarders in the Central Plaza is causing harm to the number of sells made by the shop owners. To support his claims, he gives a number of evidence which he believes proves his point. However, there are a number of faults in his line of reasoning which prevents one from coming to one conclusion or another.
First of all, he states that the number of skateboarders has increased dramatically while number of shops in the Plaza has been decreasing. While these two facts may or may not be true (as he has given no definitive proof) do not necessarily mean there is any link in between the two events. A clear reasoning needs to be provided as to why these are linked, then and only then, the events can be stated to have a cause and effect relation.
Then he talks about the belief that the shop owners have regarding their sells and skateboarders. Once again there is no clear evidence provided for this belief. This statement might also just be due to a bias that the shop owners have against the skateboarders. Also, there may very well be other factors which are affecting the business. Perhaps the customers are simply choosing other retailers due to bad pricing at the Plaza or perhaps the number of shops has increased in other parts of town leading people to go to places nearer for convenience rather then come to the Plaza.
Lastly the writer says there has been an increased number of vandalization and littering in the Plaza which, he also may very well be falsely attributing to the skateboarders. As he gives no clear evidence linking the two. This just may very well be due to factors like more people simply littering or perhaps some other group is specifically responsible. There very well may be no increase for that matter as the writer provides no evidence to support his claim. In fact, it may very well be that he himself is biased towards skateboarders for some reason!
In conclusion, the author needs to provide a solid evidence in the number of skateboarders increase and a loss in sells and address as to why other factors are not involved in diminishing sells if one is to take his argument seriously.
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also need to argue:
Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1796 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.535 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.88 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much evidence', 'a good deal of evidence'.
Suggestion: much evidence; a good deal of evidence
...owners. To support his claims, he gives a number of evidence which he believes proves his point. How...
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Line 2, column 308, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...tween the two events. A clear reasoning needs to be provided as to why these are link...
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Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...to places nearer for convenience rather then come to the Plaza. Lastly the write...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...venience rather then come to the Plaza. Lastly the writer says there has been an...
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Line 4, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lsely attributing to the skateboarders. As he gives no clear evidence linking the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, then, well, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62626262626 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63185593192 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436868686869 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1689225285 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165588954434 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632916383532 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648221801728 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100342951408 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325702633673 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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