Appearance seems important for nowadays people, especially youngsters, neither male or female. Not to mention, they spend a lot of time dressing up and do their make up before leaving, as they want to impress others. In psychology, it is one kind of self-confident, hence, people who unwilling to go out without looking good is lack of confidence. This essay agrees that people spend much more time and money on their appearance than before.
First and foremost, today society has a lot of clothing trends, for instance, BAPE, Champion and Comme des Garcons. Undeniably, these branded outfits are popular all around the world, but also pricey, however, the young ones are still willing to pay for it. By wearing these clothes, they feel that they are following the society's steps and could impress people around them. Consequently, youngsters would have less saving due to their demands on having a good image.
Cosmetic, on the other hand, has many choices in our country. Mostly, people will choose those popular brand, a Korea brand, namely, YSL. It is noticeable that in today's community, 8 out of 10 people will put on their make up before leaving the house. For example, my 15 years old sister has to wake up two hours earlier before leaving home. She has to shower, put on her makeup and pick a perfect outfit. As a result, people need to have more time to dress before leaving.
To sum up, I think that appearance is not as significant as our health. People shall spend more of their time to do other kinds of stuff, to illustrates, read more books to be knowledgeable, do some physical exercise to keep yourself fit and healthy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: NEITHER_NOR[1]
Message: Use 'nor' with neither.
Suggestion: nor
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, so, still, as to, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80633802817 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56481880005 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630281690141 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0729358727 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3125 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.125 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319960846249 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959946945656 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158578830025 0.0667982634062 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197210205012 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147055511103 0.056905535591 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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