The following appeared in a report presented for discussion at a meeting of the directors of a company that manufactures parts for heavy machinery.
“The falling revenues that the company is experiencing coincide with delays in manufacturing. These delays, in turn, are due in large part to poor planning in purchasing metals. Consider further that the manager of the department that handles purchasing of raw materials has an excellent background in general business, psychology, and sociology, but knows little about the properties of metals. The company should, therefore, move the purchasing manager to the sales department and bring in a scientist from the research division to be manager of the purchasing department.”
Discuss how well reasoned... etc.
This argument claims that internal movement within the organization would result in the desired growth of revenues for the company. In this argument the author provides specific scenario in which company's revenue is falling and blamed the fall on the purchase manager, nonetheless ruled out a judgment to replace him. The basis for this consideration is flawed in several ways and lacks key consideration points to remedy the problem at hand.
First, the author aligns the dropping revenues with the delays in manufacturing without considering deliberating other key causes of the drop. For a large conglomerate there is often more than one reason for any particular phenomena. On similar lines, one of the many reasons common to most of the heavy machinery companies is the influx of competition. Competition can arise from both an already established company and a new entrant in the line of business. The author of this argument fails to consider this key aspect while drawing to the conclusion. Other major reason for plunging revenues is the seasonality in demand of the produce of these companies. An example of seasonality is the sale of soft drinks that falls steeply in the months of December to February each year. This phenomenon does not call for an internal movement or reshuffling of the soft drink companies leadership positions. The author of the argument fails to consider various related factors before giving away his judgment, making his argument less believable and less trustworthy.
Second, the author inappropriately takes into account the subject’s field of study and correlates it with the plunging revenues. The topic of study affecting our day to day work is widely debated and well researched and no correlation whatsoever has been concluded out of the wide research. It is however a major drawback in the authors reasoning that field of study does limits a man's potential to show excellence in the work not related to his study. The argument could have been stronger if the author would have mentioned instances where the delays in manufacturing actually contribute majority of the reason in the dropping revenues and that the purchase manager, irrespective of his field of study has deliberately caused the delay or was proved inefficient in his work.
In conclusion, the argument is weak and lacks necessary reasoning to be considered as true. The argument depends on weak assumption and un-supported causal relationships between plunging sales and delay in manufacturing. To strengthen the argument the author must establish a direct relationship that proves the purchase manager involvement in the dropping of revenues.
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Essay evaluation report
need to argue:
The company should, therefore, move the purchasing manager to the sales department and bring in a scientist from the research division to be manager of the purchasing department.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2202 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.181 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.073 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 510, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
... could have been stronger if the author would have mentioned instances where the delays in manufactu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, then, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27294117647 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97264483264 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527058823529 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.339457107 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.947368421 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165192329647 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523141520658 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412319941365 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.09586556185 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058109354932 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.