Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that celebrities can make problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion
people have different views about what benefits that celebrities can bring to charity on an international level. while some people that famous figures can help international aid organizations to raise people's awareness. I would argue that they are more likely to make problems less vital.
On the one hand, it is believed that well-known people enable aid organizations to come closer to the public. The first suggestion is that due to their worldwide reputation, they can easily communicate information to a large audience. For example, Bill Gates has helped the ice bucket challenge to let millions of people know about the disease called ALS. Additionally, famous people are those who can encourage their fans to take appropriate actions as people tend to listen to the ones they admire. An illustration of this is that a prevalent football star can appeal a great amount of money donated from his fans.
On the other hand, I advocate that celebrities might make the problems become less serious. Firstly, if their image is damaged for any particular reasons, it could have a negative impact on the charity or the problem. For instance, a renowned figure can be involved in scandals such as nude photos leak, which directly loses faith in their audience. As a result, the charity has become dependent on the celebrity's being able to maintain popularity, which cannot be guaranteed. Secondly, people might only focus on what celebrities do rather than messages they try to convey. As for the aforementioned ice bucket challenge, some people just imitate the stars' actions without actually learning anything about the disease.
In conclusion, while celebrities can make a great contribution to tackling social problems, I would argue that there is a possibility of making humanitarian aid organizations less crucial when using famous figures
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23569023569 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88539419587 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589225589226 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0240050427 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36407664233 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118693472271 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938297048985 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241773175438 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960739335769 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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