Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.
People have always been trying to make a variety of their activities in order to put themselves in a good mood. In this regard, there is a debate among people on whether they should assign a specific time for relaxation by doing very different physical activities or hobbies from their work activities or not. In my opinion, it is essential for people to get relax by doing some physical activities and hobbies that are very different from what they do at work. That is due to better performance at work and health keeping. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, doing constant and monotonous activities is so boring and it affects our performance at work negatively. In other words, relaxation by doing different activities makes us more energetic at work. Consequently, we will have better performance. For example, I worked in a company six years ago. My work needed high concentration. However, I didn’t have enough concentration because I did that same work for more than five years and it was monotonous for me. Therefore, I decided to do a different activity to get relax in order to increase my concentration. I did that by playing chess with my friends. Consequently, with the start of each week, not only did I feel enormous energy in myself but also I did my work better and with more concentration.
As the second reason, getting relax by physical activities that are different from what you do at work helps you to keep your body healthy. Put simply, relaxation by doing exercises increase muscular power. My personal experience illustrates this issue quite well. In my previous work, I sat eight hours behind a desk every day. My knees and my neck hurt because I had done that same activity for a long time. Therefore, I had to change my relaxation plan from watching a movie on my laptop to do exercise. As a result, after a short time, my knees and neck have improved. If I hadn't changed my relaxation plan it would have made a serious problem for my health.
To sum up, doing different activities from what people usually do at work helps them to keep their health and have a better performance at work. These are my reasons for why I believe that people must do such activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71794871795 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80306491408 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489743589744 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7202155902 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405842436811 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124518298861 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131446001778 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291160953633 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955360757538 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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