In the past several decades, the world has gone through massive changes on both a societal and an individual level. People today face more stress than people before. The debate over whether people should take time to do what they like or exercise that differs from their daily work is still fierce. Some may suggest that doing activities that are the same as their work can serve as extra training to help them sharpen their performance. However, I hold this view differently. People should utilize this time to do something they are interested in.
To begin with, people have so much pressure that they need something to help them relieve this stress. As an office worker who is busy connecting clients, figuring out arduous assignments, and dealing with relationships between superiors and colleagues, I am so exhausted. Therefore, I would do some sports during my vacation. Spending the whole afternoon and laughing with my best friends on the court refreshed me and also improved my performance the next day; I am totally focusing on and enjoying minutes of it. Moreover, I occasionally do some exciting sports like surfing or bungee jumping; the adrenaline pumping through me helps me forget about all my troubles and stress from the workplace.
Further, doing some activities that are different from what they do at work enables people to mingle with more various people. People will have an excellent chance to get in touch with people from different backgrounds and people with different personalities. Making friends with them is exciting and refreshing, expanding their social circle simultaneously. There is also some instructive education that occurs outside the workplace. Take my personal experience as an example. I met my friend Frank during a hike. He rejects a high-paid job and devotes himself to a non-government organization to help children from unprivileged families receive education, which touches me deeply and makes me reflect.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly a wiser choice to take time to relax with hobbies or activities that differ from the daily job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...ir daily work is still fierce. Some may suggest that doing activities that are the same...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14705882353 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81321031015 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.525986841 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1052631579 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382305638706 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112152793571 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12390964684 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252528144068 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735327928909 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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