"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The author puts up a argument about the housing facilites provided by Buckingham Colllege for the students enrolled in the college. The author argues for an increase in the number of new dormitories as an increase in number of admissions in further years is expected. The author also argues that the current number of dormitories may be inadequate. Also, it is stated that it may be difficult to afford for students to live off campus due to increasing rent for apartments. Hence, to look for the consequences of the increase we must look for the viability of these idea.
The very first point which should be considered is what is the rate of admission currently compared to the rate of the graduates leaving the college in same year. Although a double over next 50 years is predicted but also each year many students will graduate and leave the college. Therefore, the requirement of new dormitory space may vary with this.
Another point is will the cost of the average rent of dormitory rooms after building new dormitory space be less than the rent of apartment off campus in the town? If the cost will not be less or is nearly equal than students may prefer living in an apartment rather on campus or may not. Hence, a better survey among students and creating a rough tender for this can be helpful in deciding whether it would be profitable to have new dormitory space or not.
Adding to this the average rent of apartments in the town is not affordable to what percentage of students should have been known in more detail. Also, the rents are high in which part of the town is also not known. The rents may be high in only a specific part of he town and pretty affordable in the other parts of town. Hence, it is important to know specifically which part are higher in costs for rent.
Also, building new dormitory space will require to convert any existing part of the College to dormitory space. It can be the football ground or the college auditorium or any other space. Are the students willing to sacrifice it for this? Is the need for a new dormitory the most important to students?
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1692 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.474 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.412 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.317 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The author puts up a argument about the housing facilites pr...
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Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dmissions in further years is expected. The author also argues that the current num...
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Line 1, column 561, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this idea' or 'these ideas'?
Suggestion: this idea; these ideas
...rease we must look for the viability of these idea. The very first point which should be ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...space be less than the rent of apartment off campus in the town? If the cost will...
^^
Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of the town'?
Suggestion: of the town
...nts may be high in only a specific part of he town and pretty affordable in the other part...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'converting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: converting
...ilding new dormitory space will require to convert any existing part of the College to dor...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59574468085 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51284049649 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452127659574 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4636093768 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9473684211 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78947368421 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172263115721 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638121870098 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590821137661 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109072060021 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661867552432 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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