Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, because of eating lots of fast food and using modern transportation vehicles, public health is at a dangerous level in most parts of the world. Although some people say that this issue could be addressed by building new sports facilities, others, including myself, believe that there are more useful actions for that purpose.
First of all, doing exercise is not able to make people healthier as long as they do not correct their diet. For instance, eating a cheeseburger full of calories makes a week of walking ineffective. So, informing people of disadvantages of unhealthy food they eat should be given the highest priority.
Second, if someone has adequate motivation for doing sports, he/she would find a way to do that eventually, such as running in the street or cycling to the workplace. In other word, it is important to encourage individuals and inspire them to exercise, which would probably compensate lack of sports facilities.
Some may argue that constructing centers and gyms is a measure that stimulates citizens who have not enough activity to do sports in those clubs, as well as making the situation easier since there is no need to go far to find one. These might be true, however, raising the number of facilities is an expensive process and would charge the government a vast amount of money could be invested in other places like roads and hospitals.
In conclusion, I personally believe that the disadvantages of creating sports facilities in order to promoting public health overwhelms the positive outcomes, since it leads to spending a huge part of national budget. But there are alternative measures such as trying to change people’s eating trend through advertising, as well as encourage and reward them to use existent ways and facilities to increasing their physical activity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 67, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...se is not able to make people healthier as long as they do not correct their diet....
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...te lack of sports facilities. Some may argue that constructing centers and gyms is a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11705685619 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85699392556 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635451505017 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.6490267693 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.090909091 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22531778908 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068914429062 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444940628768 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107827513314 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526481967307 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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