"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
The argument presents an ostensible point which some may agree to and some may not. Despite, the argument fails to address several factors that play a major role in bringing about such a change. Though it mentions that the future will be dominated by technology, it arguably fails to mention what specific technology is on the rise. It considers that forcing students to learn programming will eventually lead them to a better life without giving any regards to the interest of the students. Further, it fails to elaborate the fact as to how many of the students will eventually land a good job. Though the last point is reasonable as it mentions that even if the students pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, forcing the students to learn computer programming would be an ordeal for most of them. Several loopholes are ought to be filled and corrected before landing at such a conclusion.
Firstly, the statement "the future will be dominated by technology" doesn't provide a deep insight as to what specific technology will dominate the future. There could be hardware technology which may flourish and so the students should be more focused on the electronics aspect of technology. There could be projects and models on a more reliable and efficient use of energy which should incline the students toward environmental engineering. This aspect has to be addressed in order to strengthen the argument.
Moving on, even if programming is beneficial for the students, forcing them to study it for 4 years before letting them pursue the career of their choice is absolutely brutal. What if a student has an interest in studying law or a business course, his or her 4 years of learning programming will deteriorate not only the physical health of the student but also the mental capacity. Computer programming is not a piece of cake for everyone. A proper survey or a mock test regarding the interests of the students should be conducted and a counseling session would prove beneficial for enhancing the interests of the students. This would not only strengthen the point presented in the argument but also be more organized.
Another important aspect which the argument fails to address is what percentage of the students would eventually lead a fulfilling life with a satisfying job. As rightly said by a philosopher, money cannot buy happiness, and hence forcing the student without knowing their interest is absurd. The argument should be reinforced by a thorough analysis of the interests of the students, and if the students are more inclined toward engineering and computer programming, the argument becomes more concrete and acceptable.
Moreover, the argument falls short in providing pertinent data and facts regarding how many industries utilizes computer programming and what are the job prospects for the student who is not learning computer programming. if the percentage difference is quite negligible, the argument fails to stand. In a nutshell, the argument lacks depth and should be further reinforced to make it more reasonable and logical.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2532 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.024 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 124 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.74 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...onsiders that forcing students to learn programming will eventually lead them to a better l...
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Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e will be dominated by technology' doesnt provide a deep insight as to what speci...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ental engineering. This aspect has to be addressed in order to strengthen the arg...
^^
Line 9, column 280, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
... course, his or her 4 years of learning programming will deteriorate not only the physical ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 223, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...o is not learning computer programming. if the percentage difference is quite negl...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2606.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18091451292 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89445742596 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453280318091 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.343530611 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.454545455 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8636363636 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257816978828 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817325898379 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04899267923 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154754176926 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036406728229 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.