The prompt: 1. Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe? those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time, Which idea do you agree with?Give reasons for your choice.
Most part of people that called themselves as parents, like mother and father, have the habit of to be super protectors with their offspring. And, although some communities think that this is a good idea, allow children to discovery the world by their own seems to be a greatest option. I believe that is better offer to the sons the power of choice than make the decisions for them, because this could improve their health, learning and family rapport in later times.
First of all, some research, around the world, states that children that have power to decide how to use their free time have more release of serotonin on their body, which reflects on rising up of happiness and consequently improvements on their health. About 15 years ago, I was in my mom’s house, passing part of my vacation, and my mother told me a history about the children of hers neighbor, the child, Adan appear to be a sad person, he did not have friends and their parents almost never let him play with others at the same age, as a result Adan got sick, my mom said that the doctor suggested to the family to let him choose the ways of he would like to spend their free time, to increase his happy hormones rates. Today, Adan is a great person, due to the few changes made in the past.
Secondly, is perceivable, by teachers, that young students that devise or create their own way of leisure time can be more focus, on the teach lessons, than others, which could be seen in their high school scores. When I was in the primary school, I invented a game that I called push and hook, it was a word game, I spoke one kind of word, like an animal name, and another person said a word related to that. I and my friend played this in another language, like Portuguese, so, therefore we could learn a lot of new words and exercise our mind, as my teacher said. In addition, we got the best scores on this year within the entire college.
Finally, is reported by scientific studies that child and young adult that have freedom to choose the finest way or time that they will take their enjoyable time create solid bounds (ties) with parents. As a result, they could build amazing relationships with their loved ones. Around 5 years ago, I was about to attend the high school classes, I remember that I was so stressed because my father wanted that I participate on a religion group in my free time, as a way to relax. However, I thought that this was a waste of my rest time. I strongly talked with my parents to give me the option to make whatever I wanted with my free time. Thus, one day, after a lot of struggles, I get the power of choice. I started a ballet class and my days after this became rich with happiness. Moreover, I recovery my family amazing rapport.
In view of these facts, I strongly believe that children should set up their forms of delight. As the gods gave us the power of choice, just let them make theirs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...very the world by their own seems to be a greatest option. I believe that is bett...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Adan) must be used with a third-person verb: 'appears'.
Suggestion: appears
...ldren of hers neighbor, the child, Adan appear to be a sad person, he did not have fri...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...y of leisure time can be more focus, on the teach lessons, than others, which could be se...
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Line 7, column 396, Rule ID: WANT_THAT_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wanted me to'?
Suggestion: wanted me to
...hat I was so stressed because my father wanted that I participate on a religion group in my f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4219330855 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3060772812 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526022304833 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.2568121007 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.95 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260498640934 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712236727879 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624435878403 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142448366112 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496695833092 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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