Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break: ۱٫ Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study
(For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.) ۲٫ Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some
aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples.
In the modern era, a student has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, academicians have always sought ways to enhance the educational systems. Some people may hold the view that for long time vacations, students ought to select a course that irrelevant their major of study. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that pupils ought to become a candidate to work at university in their city or hometown for enhancing lifestyle. I content that students can bring several points by selecting a different course on vacation. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that students may find their talent. To elaborate on my point, when engineering students select other courses such as art or social science, they are able to find their talent. In this situation, they may follow other major instead of their main major, and they will become a prosperous person. For example, one of my friends studied chemical engineering at Esfahan University of Technology - IUT is one of the best university of Iran. She was a talented person, but she did not like chemical engineering. So, she selected an elective low course in one term. After it, she was able to find her talent. And, she cancelled the study of chemical engineering and followed low. After 7 years, now, she is one of the famous lawyers in my country. But, if she followed chemical engineering, she would not become a successful person.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that students have able to learn new skills or sciences. To shed more light on this matter, when students learn another major, they can follow this major independently. Therefore, they can learn other professions beside their major, and earn extra money from the second professions or start their second jobs. Consider a teacher who knows to programmer, for instance. She can do some computer projects and earn a lot of money from the second job. Also, if she fires from her main career, she can start her job. Additionally, because she has information about a computer, she can up to date her knowledge; hence, she becomes a prosperous teacher in school.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons leads us to the conclusion that a different course has several positive points for students. I believe that students not only can find their talent but also can learn new profession.
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- TPO 61 80
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job 73
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part time job 70
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 73
- In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why? 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04086538462 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74260230405 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526442307692 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6598557412 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.88 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.64 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221431380304 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640307970389 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053505765812 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145401989931 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556477138472 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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