Many residents have recognized that the advantages brought about by team sports are more numerous, whereas opponents of this idea prefer participating in individual sports. Personally, while single disciplines can exert positive impacts, I opine that collective ones offer more benefits.
On the one hand, there are a number of discernible pluses for which sports with single player are appreciated. Indeed, taking up individual disciplines such as tennis or badminton, to fulfill their inherent aspiration for victory, participants must shoulder a wide variety of responsibilities by themselves, ranging from strategy development, injury recovery to fitness regime planning. Moreover, during tournaments, it is also only on their own will challenge posed by opponents be tackled. As a result, it can be deduced that individual sports honor individualism, in which the more regularly citizens get involved, the more likely they are to be independent. By contrast, if people compete in team sports, they may have many dilemmas dealt by others, leading to a lack in problem-solving skills.
On the other hand, I am in favor of the idea that collective sports are more beneficial because of two major reasons. Firstly, regarding to participants, team disciplines play an important role in fostering interpersonal skills. Specifically, interaction between teammates may instill a whole array of positive traits, contributing to good team players who can prevent breakdown in communication or motivate others to strive. Secondly, regarding to the entire community, another advantage stems from collective disciplines’ ability to strengthen solidarity. In particular, it is obvious that playing as a team brings residents into contact, and this is expected to act as a catalyst for develop mutual sympathy. For example, when the entire nation of South Africa celebrated their victory at World Rugby Championship 1995, the triumph was deem as a milestone after which race discrimination was totally eradicated.
Briefly, while gains contributed by individual sports are remarkable, it seems to me that they are still outweighed by those reaped in collective disciplines.
- The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The chart shows the average annual pay for doctors and other workers in 7 different countries in 2004.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 84
- Many people think studying in university is a waste of time and money. They are supposed that young people should work for real experience. Do you agree or disagree? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... discrimination was totally eradicated. Briefly, while gains contributed by indi...
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...those reaped in collective disciplines.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, whereas, while, as to, for example, in particular, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66666666667 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28220759274 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639143730887 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.718749782 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.357142857 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6428571429 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170093515745 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524335114165 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417996898033 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977300703221 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034764574165 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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