you have enough money to purchase either a car or a business. which would you choose to buy?
Without any shadow of doubt earning and investing money in accurate and right place plays an essential role in people’s life. in this regard, there is a heated controversy as to whether it is better to invest money on cars or purchase and commence new business. As a vision, if I had enough money, I would definitely invest my money in business. I feel this way for great number of reasons among which, adding more value to money and having flourishing and brighter future are considerable.
To begin with, investing money in a business can be more beneficial that buying a car. When one purchases a business adds more value to money because buying cars usually are associated with paying substantial amount of taxes, whereas it is not necessary to pay lots of taxes in start of a business. Moreover, one by investing her or his money in right business can later earn enough money to buy her or his favorite car and by doing so, one can possess both car and successful business. As you can see, purchasing new business have more advantage that buying a car.
Another privilege of buying a business has to do with having better financial future. Although it may be claims that having money do not guarantee happy or successful future, it certainly paves the way for accessing to quite a few facilities such as high education which is step stone in order to be more successful in life. in addition, investing in business has longer consequences than buying a car because this way one can provide money for her or his next generation and bequeath money for them to extend the business. In contrast, even most expensive and sophisticated cars have limited age and can function for short amount of time, therefore it does not have beneficial results.
In conclusion, by taking into account all the pros and cons, I strongly believe that the virtues of buying a business significantly outweigh those of buying car, on the ground that commencing successful business has better consequences which are increasing value of money immensely and also providing brighter financial future not only for ourselves but also for our next generation. Although establishing successful business is always accompanied by severe obstacles, one by research and help of others can readily start one.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
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Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: In
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, as to, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9274611399 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77098910638 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507772020725 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5654543183 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.857142857 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323014383472 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128681823096 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771447809401 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197882686537 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783635208974 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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