Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
These days, music has aroused people’s discussion. In the belief of some people, music is claimed as a good way to connect people regardless their cultures and ages. I take the view that this idea is fairly compelling except in several cases.
In my favor of advocating for this trend, there are a plethora of reasons and merits when applying this idea. First, since music is the most popular hobby; therefore, there are uncountable clubs or groups, which are establish for music lovers to exchange information together. Underground music, for instance, has a large community that connects audiences and artists on over the world together. Moreover, fans of a particular band are prone to gather together and share about artworks of their idols. Second, by controlling the feelings of listeners, music could creat the spiritual connections between humans. In football, each team has its cheering song and whenever the song is played, it links everyone together no matter how old they are.
However, it is not necessarily appropriate in all situations. In Korean, recently, with the increasing development of entertainment industry, there have been some ongoing problems between the fan clubs. They assume that their idol is the best and dispute each other, not only that, but they also fustigate artists they hate. As a result, the Korean government has faced increasing suicide rates of celebrity.
All in all, existing as minor drawbacks are, it will not prevent us from concluding that music plays a pivotal role in bringing people together. I believe that by doing so, the barrier between humankind will not appear anymore.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'established'.
Suggestion: established
... uncountable clubs or groups, which are establish for music lovers to exchange informatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19622641509 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71262753923 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660377358491 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.460174363 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202919100965 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583486267115 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672887530722 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122163253989 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08022807771 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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