“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
I strongly support the petition of an environmental protection group against the plan of establishing a small hotel inside Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Some aspects based on which I support environmentalists veto are descrbed below.
First of all, a sanctuary is a pristine place for flora an fauna. Some animals are sensitive to human interrruption. So, if a new hotel is built within the sanctuary, it can hinder the animals breeding process and their natural ecosystem as well.
Secondly, the statement states that the sanctuary is essential for the survival of 300 bird species which indicates the prime importance of protection of the wildlife sanctuary. The birds might be the most endengered birds and the last existing specicies of their kind. Human invading can be a catalyst to make those bird species endangered to non-existing bird species.
Additionally, the Smith Corporation wants to build a hotel which will attract many people. This serene sanctuary will soon turn into a crowdy, noisy place. Also when there will be a hotel, the intensity of vehicle movement will increase dramatically. Vibration, sound of vehicles may also disrupt the wildlife's natural way of living.
Moreover, during construction there will be a huge noise for days which might force the species to leave the sanctuary and it is uncertain that those species will survive after leaving their essential requirement of survival. Besides construction noise, after opening the hotel there will be a many working people, who might not afford living on the neighborhood. They will try to encroach the land which was not primarily included in the hotel area. This will surely disturb the bird species.
Above all, though it is not clear building hotel will be more beneficial that bird sighting, but the possibility is very high of declining wildlife of the Youngtown Wildlife Reserve.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1533 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.797 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.738 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ironmentalists veto are descrbed below. First of all, a sanctuary is a pristine ...
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Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...sanctuary is a pristine place for flora an fauna. Some animals are sensitive to hu...
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Line 13, column 157, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...l soon turn into a crowdy, noisy place. Also when there will be a hotel, the intensi...
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Line 17, column 337, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...ny working people, who might not afford living on the neighborhood. They will try to e...
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Line 21, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...life of the Youngtown Wildlife Reserve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31666666667 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87006774988 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573333333333 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3333411266 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8235294118 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215359198296 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066106408091 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491621021806 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103571335064 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056756840506 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.