Promoting violence by singers, computer games and movies among young people has raised concerns in many societies. We will discuss the most serious problems arising, and also two ways in which the worries can be allayed.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">Arguably the gravest problem caused by adopting violence in programs which children are expose to them is to breed juvenile delinquents who certainly have ill effects on the society. these children seem to be more susceptible group of community to be persuaded to commit criminal actions. A further serious impact is the disruption to their relationships, especially with their peers and family. they may ultimately become aggressive and offensive, so that their ability to sustain relationships with both their circle of friends and family members will drastically curtail. The long term consequences of this issue may include depression, isolation and academic underperformance. Thus, we can argue that developing violence in programs which are aim at children may be detrimental.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">To counteract theses dangers, perhaps the most effective and most immediate remedy would be for government and politicians to ban brutality promotion in such programs. For example, members of parliament may pass a law in order to control strictly these kinds of programs, as it is being suggested in Iran. this would less the anxiety of breading young criminals and prevent them from being persuaded to commit crime. Another solution may be to encourage parents to control their children needs strictly, so that they can learn safely and boost their knowledge using nonviolent programs. Instigating these measures will possibly dispel all concerns.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">In conclusion, the main problems seem to be breeding crime and potential relationship breakdown. The key solution would be implementation of censorship policy and strict family control on children requirements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.31178707224 5.12529762239 143% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.59589757506 2.80592935109 342% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627376425856 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.1 1.60771543086 131% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.4848024228 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.923076923 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0743708706962 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394395231763 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341163713383 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0600764038737 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244428670733 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.1 13.0946893788 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 8.88 50.2224549098 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 25.12 12.4159519038 202% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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