Some people believe that it is best to accept difficult situations such as having an unsatisfactory job or a lack of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Promoting violence by singers, computer games and movies among young people has raised concerns in many societies. We will discuss the most serious problems arising, and two ways in which the worries can be allayed.
Arguably the gravest problem caused by adopting violence in programs which children are exposed to them is to breed juvenile delinquents who certainly have ill effects on the society. These children seem to be more susceptible group of community to be persuaded to commit criminal actions. A further serious impact is the disruption to their relationships, especially with their peers and family. they may ultimately become aggressive and offensive, so that their ability to sustain relationships with both their circle of friends and family members will drastically curtail. The long-term consequences of this issue may include depression, isolation and academic underperformance. Thus, we can argue that developing violence in programs which are aimed at children may be harmful.
To counteract theses dangers, perhaps the most effective and most immediate remedy would be for government and politicians to ban brutality promotion in such programs. For example, members of parliament may pass a law in order to control strictly these kinds of programs, as it is being suggested in Iran. this would less the anxiety of breading young criminals and prevent them from being persuaded to commit crime. Another solution may be to encourage parents to control their children needs strictly, so that they can learn safely and boost their knowledge using nonviolent programs. Instigating these measures will possibly dispel all concerns.
In conclusion, the main problems seem to be breeding crime and potential relationship breakdown. The key solution would be implementation of censorship policy and strict family control on children requirements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58245614035 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95293125831 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617543859649 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4845214875 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.066666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0498327659938 0.244688304435 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173483503221 0.084324248473 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0172915694939 0.0667982634062 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0287220494082 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171363158462 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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