While some of them argue that it is the most essential factor to become happy, others believe that friends and family would bring more happiness.
In recent years, there is a phenomenon that people are following the purpose of maximizing profits in order to achieve happiness. While some of them argue that it is the most essential factor to become happy, others believe that friends and family would bring more happiness. From my point of views, I completely agree with the statement that people would be happier if they have a variety of strong relationships.
On the one hand, it is clear that people without money cannot be able to feel as happy as those who are rich. The first reason for this is that poor people are not able to entertain and relax. It is because they are always put under many life pressures such as family need, job, career, food and drink that prevent them from feeling the sense of happiness altogether. Moreover, as poverty arise, these people would thus lose their financial independence and have to rely on society to survival. They would then lack self-freedom, which make them harder to enjoy the tiny happiness from their lives. In other words, people who prone to poverty would not be easy to meet happiness.
On the other hand, while money is indispensable to create a sense of happiness, friends and family should be the factor to bring much stronger feelings of satisfaction. These relationships are always covering your life and routine that would be able to make a long sense of happy. This means that people who are close to you, therefore, would understand your circumstances better than anyone else that knows what can bring happiness to you. Furthermore, siblings and close friends are the only ones who can sympathize with your emotions such as sadness, angry and disappointed, which possessions and money can give to you, thus carry you to true happiness. So, happiness could be delivered into one's life in various ways through significant relationships.
In conclusion, while it is important to receive a certain amount of money in order to reduce the pressure that comes from daily life, it is family and friends that are inevitable to create one's happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92571428571 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63626823447 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.013108963 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.933333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332955367226 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126205817586 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.241709417921 0.0667982634062 362% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225100340028 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17217324375 0.056905535591 303% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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