The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"A recent national survey found that the majority of workers with access to the Internet at work had used company computers for personal or recreational activities, such as banking or playing games. In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Using electronic monitoring software is the best way to reduce the number of hours Climpson employees spend on personal or recreational activities. We predict that installing software to monitor employees' Internet use will allow us to prevent employees from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The vice president recommends that the company should use electronic monitoring software to alleviate the employees' prodcutivity and thus the profits. To support his recommendation, the author cites findings from a national survey that workers with internet access use company computers for personal and recreational activities and thus, hampers the productivity. Though, at first glance, the author's reasoning seems plausable, but on futher delibration, the answers to specific questions could help us validate the if outcome of the plan would be as predicted.
Firstly, is the survey applicable to the company? In other words, do the sample choosen for the national survey represent company's employees? The vice president implicitly suggests that the finding of the survey is applicable to its company's employees and there is no reason not to doubt that the employees are not working at their full potential due to access to internet. However, there are no details of the survey mentioned with out which we cannot ascertain if the survey results are applicable to its employees. There is a possibility that the company's employees are deligent towards their duty even with the access to the internet contrary to what the vice president implies. If the employees are austere about their work, then the author's claim that the employees are unnecessarily wasting time on the internet does not hold water.
Second of all, how can one assert that using company's computers and the Internet for personal and recreational activities exacerbate the employees' efficiency? Without the Internet, one would have to go to a bank to make a transaction which inherently requires to travel in a congested city on a bumpy road. By the time the employee reaches offieces, half a day would get consumed. In addition, the employee would become enervated due the strain during travel which would inadvertently affect his efficiency. In fact, Internet has made in it possible to perform onerous task at lightening speed with no effort which otherwise would not be possible. Recreational activities rekindles the enthusiasum in the employees and thus boosts their productivity. As long as the employees are not misusing their freedom, one cannot state that Internet is a hinderance to the employees' productivity.
Last but not the least, is electronic monitoring the best to check the misuse of Internet by the employees? Though it could be fruitful in the beginning, it would lead to degradation in relationship between the employees and the company in the long run. There can be a discontent insinuating among the employees that the company does not trust them and thus, there is every possibility that the employees do not work to their best. This disbelief would not only preclude employees from working deligently but also would slowly lead to the collapse of the company. Hence, the author, before prematurely concluding that electronic monitoring would prevent employees from doing personal and recreational activities, should give a considerable thought over the consequences of implementing such strenous plan.
As a whole, the argument, as it stands, is unwarranted as its efficacy of the recommendation would depend on the answers to the aforementioned questions.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 515 350
No. of Characters: 2692 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.764 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.227 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.945 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 131 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 93 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
... are no details of the survey mentioned with out which we cannot ascertain if the survey...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
... recreational activities exacerbate the employees efficiency? Without the Internet, one w...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'traveling', 'travelling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: traveling; travelling
...a transaction which inherently requires to travel in a congested city on a bumpy road. By...
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Line 5, column 863, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...te that Internet is a hinderance to the employees productivity. Last but not the least...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, then, thus, in addition, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2751.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 515.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34174757282 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01050788013 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467961165049 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 839.7 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1426104145 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.045454545 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243300148242 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850217524309 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083648770618 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149297557999 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110800160317 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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