Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people?
Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience
Since the ancient centuries professional athletes have been in the center of young people attention. Today famous sportsmen become very honorable among youngsters, not only because of their healthy lifestyle, but because of earning a lot of sponsored money. Although I agree that professional athletes are good examples for imitation, I am convinced that some young people may over overestimate their skills and make damage to the heath.
On the one hand, permanent sport activity is very necessary for youngsters and prevent their deviated behavior. Young sportsmen have to move bad habits out of the life, because they decrease the achievements. For example, swimming and smoking conflict with each other, because all extraordinary results and techniques are connected with perfect lungs. Thus, professional athletes as idol push youngsters to change their life and except unhealthy customs.
On the other hand, current healthy and achievement trend in our society cause a lot of accidents when young people break their life and career because of sport injury. For example, my close friend lost the ability to walk because she made too many trainings in the fitness club. She had an idol professional bodybuilder and wanted to resemble her, but her back wasn’t prepared for such ambitious goals. Thus, all initiatives that are connected with professional sport have to be controlled with professional trainer.
Resulting all mentioned above, even though professional athletes make good role models for young people, I believe that everything have to be under control of experienced sportsmen and trainer. In this case the youngsters will avoid injuries and other negative consequences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since the ancient centuries professional athl...
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Line 4, column 275, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...juries and other negative consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46946564885 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82337766749 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610687022901 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9165352144 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.230769231 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221317060251 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780217253885 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721284519413 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144439760278 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416331605832 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.