Advertising that targets children should be banned from our televisions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that the advertisements that influence the young generation should be removed from the TV programs. I believe that some TV adverts that might impact on children’s psychology negatively should be prohibited while the ones which are informative and useful should be kept on.
Concerns over the mental and behavioural negative impacts of ads on children are ever growing among parents. The advertising companies employ teams of psychologists in order to find ways to manipulate people’s minds to make people buy. Admittedly, young boys and girls become easy targets. The commercials which are sought to attract children to shape the future customers are numerous. Playful music, colourful attractive pictures and repetitive catchy words influence children so they become capricious and stubborn and make their parents buy the product they have watched on a TV advert. Therefore, some influential adverts should be banned on TV.
On the other hand, there are many advertisements that provide very beneficial information. These kinds of ads help parents to stay up to date about the new versions of products and choose proper and suitable ones for themselves and for their children. For example, if one is searching for books for his children or some toys that develop children’s intellectual growth, he can buy the latest upgraded versions of these things. In this case, the prohibition of these kinds of adverts would be much more disadvantageous.
To conclude, even though some adverts might harm children and they should be prevented from, in my opinion, banning of some useful ones would bring some difficulties in society. As they say not every bitter thing is poison.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, while, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88314005394 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618518518519 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4220164935 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.214285714 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189240430482 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067705912486 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604624180323 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127795538662 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538003220312 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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