You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You should write at least 250 words.
It has been noticed widely that, with the growing use of technology for almost every aspect of normal life,the people, especially children are spending more time immerse themselves in a various kind of online games and social media. As a result, this lead to a sedentary lifestyle which is the reason of numerous problems related to heath such as: obesity, nearsightednes. For this reason, i highly appreciate with the statement supposed that: children should be encouraged to take part in ourdoor activities rather than playing computer game.
First, the most obvious advantage of playing outside is: it help to control children’s body mass index and improve their ability to fight of illness as well as enhancing the activeness of a child.Kids who play outside could be engaged by the activities such as: jogging, swimming, running that generally burn more calories than their sedentary counterparts. Excess calories means that you could suffer from obesity which is considered a high risk of asthma, cardiovascular disease, diabete and sleep apnea ., Not only does it help to improve the overall health but it also help to sharp their agility, coordination and collaboration-skills since children have an opportunity to play with each others and strengthen a variety skills that are needed for the future.
While there are many physical benefits to outdoor play, it provides a huge opportunity for social development in children as well.Playing outside also play a significant role in how a child define their world. By this i mean, kids could have a strong sense of the environment encompassing us. By playing outside, they could love every moment in the environment. They have looked squirrels chasing each other up a tree, they have witnessed the moment when the sun rises, they have been planting a numerous trees in order to surviving harmoniously with the environment. They also learn always be aware of themselves because playing outside give children an opportunity to explore the world from a different perspective.
In conclusion, the more regular we play outside, the more benefical consequences that we receive from it.Playing outside enrich our knowledge about the environment as well as teaching us a numerous advantageous skills from the existent life. Therefore, avoiding spending hours playing computer games, using that time for learning and experiencing instead and it can make a huge renovation for both of you and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, while, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28900255754 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94570735055 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580562659847 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.4007628667 49.4020404114 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.333333333 106.682146367 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5833333333 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199163281637 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072881224981 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559437231598 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12286218898 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357835470179 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.0946893788 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.