Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The society must instill a sense of cooperation and healthy competition in the minds of young people to prepare them for roles of leadership. The extreme nature of the prompt is the best solution to the paradigm. I disagree with the prompt for two reasons.
Firstly,the leaders in any industry are responsible to grease the wheels to keep a team of people wroking in and out daily. And a team is a leader's refelction as in a team looks up to the leader for his qualities while working alongside people and follows it. For instance, a textile businessman who sells cotton,sees that the market is seeing an increase in silk yarn. But going into the silk yarn trade would require him to connect with people who he considers as his competitors. What should he do? In this case,if the leader decides to expand his business to silk yarn,he should be effectively thinking of his growth and must realise that he will son be a part of both the trades if he cooperates with the silk yarn trader unions. On the ohter hand,if the leader is stuck n the competition,he might lose himself a big opportunity. Hence it is important for students to understand the value of coopertaion agianst competition
Secondly, in fields of government,industry and other such influential jobs,the first step to get in is through working with the existing magnates and learn the craft by cooperating with the superiors and inferiors alike. The example of AMUL aka Anand Milk Union Limited is one such instance when the leader showed how through cooperation one can beat competition. The milk suppliers in India had monopoly in certain areas and each area had a different person and hence a different price,due to which the public suffered a lot. Verghese Kurien,the founder of AMUL,talked to all the milk suppliers and put forth the proposal of a single milk union,throughout the country. Today,AMUL stands as India's largest supply of milk and dairy products.
This example illustrates that competition proves to be useful when one is in a superior position where the competition will enhance his skills or help him network.It could never be the first step. Whereas cooperation,as a skill can effectively beat competition as it gives people a feeling of support.
While it is true that a competition fosters a sense of achievement and pushes one to give his best and if not win,learn enough to be able to win the next time. But competition in professional world is not as innocuous as it is in schools. In a profeesional world it could lead to detrimental results in the form of jealousy,loss of relations and in worst case scenario, economical losses. Hence students in school must be taught the difference between a healthy competition and an unhealthy one. A school must imbue students to work in teams and use cooperation as a tool to solve the problems,afterall what cant be done by an individual can always be done by a team.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... wroking in and out daily And a team is a leaders refelction as in a team looks up to the...
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...d require him to connect with people who he considers as his competitors What sho...
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... the leader is stuck n the competitionhe might lose himself a big opportunity Hen...
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...oughout the country TodayAMUL stands as Indias largest supply of milk and dairy products Th...
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...argest supply of milk and dairy products This example illustrates that competitio...
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... as it gives people a feeling of support While it is true that a competition fost...
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...e form of jealousyloss of relations and in worst case scenario economical losses Hence s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, whereas, while, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 498.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75903614458 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89229129688 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506024096386 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 498.0 23.0359550562 2162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2370.0 118.986275619 1992% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 498.0 23.4991977007 2119% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 107.0 5.21951772744 2050% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284161245152 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.284161245152 0.0831039109588 342% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136678227601 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395491903696 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 250.0 14.1392134831 1768% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -425.53 48.8420337079 -871% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 196.3 12.1743820225 1612% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.81 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.79 8.38706741573 379% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 11.8971910112 462% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 201.2 11.2143820225 1794% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 250.0 11.7820224719 2122% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.