In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In many cultures, young adolescents are motivated to visit many far-flung corners in the world as well as engage in some occupations before enrolling in higher education. Although this phenomenon contains both pros and cons, I strongly believe that there would be much more benefits gained through these experiences
On the one hand, taking a gap year to travel far away is a really good idea since it does not only give the young people more opportunities to expand their mind but also help them to make up their mind in terms of future job. In fact, since they have to live and adapt to a whole new culture, they progressively become independent, develop more soft skills and have deeper insights into many aspects of life. In addition, these people are going through the threshold of their life, which is deciding their major and future career, so taking a year off to encounter a new environment is really practical as it can equip them with a host of hands-on experiences as well as give them more information related to different jobs. Aa a result, it gives them a more precise look into each occupation and help them realize what they truely want to do
On the other hand, this activity can take its toll on these young people as a vast majority of them are inexperienced and immature, they would probably have to cope with many challenges that they have never experienced once. Specifically, these people lack of many practical knowledges that they never have heard about since they have been catered so well by their parents. Therefore, it is problematic when they have to encounter life-issues, for example some people do not even know how to wash their own clothes as they always have their clothes washed by a washing machine, therefore, when they move to a new area that lacks of this equipment they will totally find themselves in trouble. Moreover, because of the same reasons, people who just graduated from high school can be potentially preys of many cybercriminals and other crimes
To conclude, it is really fascinating to while away for a year before taking the university studies. Although this decision can bring some shortcomings due to the inexperience of young adolescents, I still endorse the idea that they should take this chance as it is really valuable and practical for their future path
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...able and practical for their future path
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86180904523 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65633507058 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532663316583 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 20.2975951904 217% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3611455748 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 215.0 106.682146367 202% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.2222222222 20.7667163134 213% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.3333333333 7.06120827912 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171834544756 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792755777038 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488618211694 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11052845058 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473881123397 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.6 13.0946893788 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.28 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.6 10.1190380762 194% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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