The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client.
"Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced 90 days with below-average temperatures,
and climate forecasters at Waymarsh University predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because these
developments will certainly result in an increased demand for heating oil, we recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help
to evaluate the recommendation.
The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client. Author drawn conclusion on analysis climate forecast at waymarsh University predict that, Increased in temperature increased demand for heating oil and recommend in investment in conslidated industries, one of whose major business operation is retail sale of home heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which need strong evidences. Before arguments to be pass, let us look in to given argument.
Firstly, author made agreed point that, homes in the northeastern United states, where winter are typically cold, have used oil as major fuel for heating. author need to provide statistical data, which shows number of residential family use oil as major fuel for heating. author mention winter are typically cold, with an supporting claim that last year an region experienced 90 days with below average temperature. Author need an specific staistical data such temperature graph, which shows an up and down line of temperature. They failed to mention to what level did they fall to end for how much time during those 90 days? was it consistant. If temperature may vary from 1 to 2 degree then prediction of Waymarsh University may fail. The data is provided of last year, it might different situation in upcoming year, we just don't know.
Secondly, Author had made point that Many new homes have built in this region during the past year. Even though new homes built in an given region, the residential people may not leave there instead they just made an home as an property. They work outside northeastern
united states. It might possiblity, even though they leave in northen united state they may not prefered to leave in winter days to due an climate issue. Author need to survey that how many of them staying in northeastern united states from long years ago, those who are new
in Northeastern united states.
Last but not least, author made strong point that because of this development will certainly result in an incresed demand for heating oil, recommend in consolidated industries one of whose major business operation is retail sale of home heating oil. The author need to required
to survey whether heating oil used by residential is throughout year or for specific winter days. If Retailer had made production on the year basis then he may fail loss instead of profit.
In an concluding section, author need to survey all point before concluding because after all it's bear to retailer who had done of prodcution of oil.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2069 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.88 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.577 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.376 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...ail sale of home heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which need strong eviden...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... of home heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which need strong eviden...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...ave used oil as major fuel for heating. author need to provide statistical data, which...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...mily use oil as major fuel for heating. author mention winter are typically cold, with...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...mention winter are typically cold, with an supporting claim that last year an regi...
^^
Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...with an supporting claim that last year an region experienced 90 days with below a...
^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... below average temperature. Author need an specific staistical data such temperatu...
^^
Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...for how much time during those 90 days? was it consistant. If temperature may vary ...
^^^
Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uring those 90 days? was it consistant. If temperature may vary from 1 to 2 degree...
^^
Line 3, column 828, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ent situation in upcoming year, we just dont know. Secondly, Author had made poi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...st year. Even though new homes built in an given region, the residential people ma...
^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... not leave there instead they just made an home as an property. They work outside ...
^^
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...there instead they just made an home as an property. They work outside northeaster...
^^
Line 6, column 137, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...prefered to leave in winter days to due an climate issue. Author need to survey th...
^^
Line 6, column 275, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s from long years ago, those who are new in Northeastern united states. Last ...
^^^
Line 9, column 270, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[5]
Message: Did you mean 'require'?
Suggestion: require
...of home heating oil. The author need to required to survey whether heating oil used by ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ghout year or for specific winter days. If Retailer had made production on the yea...
^^
Line 12, column 4, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...may fail loss instead of profit. In an concluding section, author need to surv...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03546099291 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62146267833 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498817966903 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1804605206 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350076414323 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105109660975 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109857738378 0.0701772020484 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147053512149 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724143360151 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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