Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the current modern world in which we are living, financial and economical issues have an important role in every individual’s life. While many people assert that it is essential for kids to become familiar with money management at lower ages, others believe otherwise and think that children should not be forced to learn financial concepts. I strongly support the former idea for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that children have fresh minds and they are more enthusiastic to learn new lessons in comparison with adults. Since at this age they are not getting involved with various problems of life and their main task is studying, they can become familiar with the foundation of financial concepts and learn different economic tricks. Besides, when kids start this work at a lower age, they would have enough time for practicing and increasing their financial knowledge. For instance, unfortunately, my older brother is an engineer who did not learn economic concepts in his childhood. Due to a lack of enough knowledge in the financial field, he got into trouble in his job, and in the last situation, his construction company got bankrupted. He wish he could learn these concepts when he was younger and had enough time to practice his economic lessons.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point is that learning money management and start saving money in childhood provide a situation for children to have a great amount of money when they get older. They can spend this money on some significant works like paying their university tuition, wedding ceremony costs, buying a house, or whatever they want and it is a great help for becoming independent. As a case in point, I have to mention my best friend who started saving a part of his pocket money when he was just ten years old. At the age of 21, he used his childhood investment for starting his own startup. Now, he is one of the famous people in the field of building mobile applications. He always mentions in all of his interviews that he never thought as a kid that those small parts of money which he was saving would be one of the keys to his success in the future.
By taking into account all the above reasons, I believe that children should learn money management in their childhood. It is because not only do they have fresh minds and are ready to learn these concepts faster than adults, but they also can save much more money and use it in their future life.
- TPO29 Integrated 70
- TPO15 80
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
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- TPO 55 integrated 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...d in which we are living, financial and economical issues have an important role in every ...
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Line 3, column 773, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wishes'.
Suggestion: wishes
...construction company got bankrupted. He wish he could learn these concepts when he w...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, thus, while, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79357798165 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56975736037 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520642201835 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3369250763 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.941176471 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209594400617 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756496527826 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598803064118 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148126627927 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291794838356 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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