The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk and dairy products for commercial sale Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The process diagram delineates how the milk and dairy stuffs fabricated in dairy for commercial sale and what are the procedure of creation.
Overall, it is explicitly observed that the manufacturing of these commercial products has 8 different stages which is initiated from cow grazing and end up on supermarket and stores.
Now turning back to details, firstly the fabrication starts with cow grazing in green fields, after that the cows taken into milking machine twice a day. Thereafter the milk was stored in a huge refrigerator since the milk tanker came for delivery of milk and after filling the stored milk in the tanker it get delivered in dairy.
Moving further, the delivered milk pass through a pasteurization process and converted into numerous milk as well as dairy stuffs like, chees milk and butter then it goes under packaging according to their variety so that they can easily classified and following this the stuffs sends to markets and super markets as well as stores.

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thereafter,
...taken into milking machine twice a day. Thereafter the milk was stored in a huge refrigera...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...illing the stored milk in the tanker it get delivered in dairy. Moving further, th...
^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'classify'
Suggestion: classify
...o their variety so that they can easily classified and following this the stuffs sends to ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0303030303 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67082320688 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630303030303 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3495493857 43.030603864 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.0 112.824112599 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 22.9334400587 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.23603664747 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199073372027 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109775230993 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812703371547 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127845730663 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785138804888 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.2329268293 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thereafter,
...taken into milking machine twice a day. Thereafter the milk was stored in a huge refrigera...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...illing the stored milk in the tanker it get delivered in dairy. Moving further, th...
^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'classify'
Suggestion: classify
...o their variety so that they can easily classified and following this the stuffs sends to ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0303030303 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67082320688 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630303030303 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3495493857 43.030603864 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.0 112.824112599 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 22.9334400587 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.23603664747 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199073372027 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109775230993 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812703371547 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127845730663 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785138804888 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.2329268293 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.