Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.
People usually possess different views on the issues that getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this thought, and I will delve into it in the following essay.
First of all, I am not good at difficult courses, and if I get advice who are older than me, I can get useful ideas. For example, when I was a university student, I had a difficult project for computer class, and it required to finish in one week. Then, I asked my friend, John, who was 2 years older than me, for helping me to do the project, and his suggestions were really useful. At the end, my project finished before the dateline, and also got a good grade in the class. On the other hand, if I asked my friends, Dave, who ahs same age with me, for giving me advice, he would give some bad ideas. He would probably suggest me to quit the class, or copied someone's project. Apparently, getting advice from friends same as my age will have many useless suggestions.
Secondly, I am poor, and if I get advice from older friends, I can earn more money. Take myself experience as an example. My older friends told me to invest a new company, and it would make a lot of profits in the future. Therefore, I took all my money for these friends, and wish them can help me to get fortune. Finally, this investment made considerable revenue in the second year, and I earn lots of money to pay all my bills and loans. However, if I listened to the friends same as my age, they might take away my money, or spend it right away. Obviously, getting advice from friends who are older than me, can give me many opportunities to get fortune.
Last but not least, friends who are same age as me are lazy, but older friends are not. That is, I can learn how to become hard-working people from older friends by their advice. For instance, when I lived with 2 of my friends in the rental house, one was same age as me, and the other was older than me. The older one usually spent 12 hours a day for studying and researching. Moreover, he even spent almost his summer vacation to finish his project in the lab. He always told me how to use my time efficiently, to become a hard-working people, and to have a good future. Finally, I became a good researcher because of his advice. Conversely, the friend, who had same as my age, was lazy and always suggested me that not to be too aggressive, hence he was failed all of his courses in every semester. Undoubtly, older friends can motivate me to become proactive person.
In conclusion, my opinion from the above essay stands my reason why I agree that older friends' advice are more valuable. After all, since that older friends' advice can provide me useful ideas, earn more money, and keep away from lazy.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40856031128 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41198376289 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453307392996 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.86738351254 803% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0141455604 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9259259259 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.037037037 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.40740740741 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397441447967 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133718630109 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145097232089 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286948715158 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509064937802 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40856031128 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41198376289 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453307392996 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.86738351254 803% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0141455604 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9259259259 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.037037037 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.40740740741 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397441447967 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133718630109 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145097232089 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286948715158 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509064937802 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.