The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.

The bar graph illustrates how many school children allocated their time in a daily basis to online conversation and playing console games in UK.
In total,boys who played on console games had the biggest growth.While boys spent the least time on chatting through the Internet than girls.
To begin with playing on games console among boys,girls and all,the highest playing games was between boys and consisted almost 80%. Only 50% of girls played games and it was the least percentage than other categories. By comparison, the average percentage of people was higher than 50%.
On the other hand,online conversation in all 3 categories was less than allocating time on playing games. Boys had decrease by 16% than girls, but in comparison,all school children’s spending time was almost 60%. Girls spent their time more on chatting than boys and girls who allocate their time on playing games on console.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , boys
...d playing console games in UK. In total,boys who played on console games had the big...
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Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...on console games had the biggest growth.While boys spent the least time on chatting t...
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Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on console games had the biggest growth.While boys spent the least time on chatting t...
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Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , girls
...with playing on games console among boys,girls and all,the highest playing games was b...
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Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...n games console among boys,girls and all,the highest playing games was between boys ...
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Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , online
... was higher than 50%. On the other hand,online conversation in all 3 categories was le...
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Line 4, column 160, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , all
...ase by 16% than girls, but in comparison,all school children’s spending time was alm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 761.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 148.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14189189189 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71318070264 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547297297297 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9871842151 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.125 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232662952945 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114529552444 0.103423049105 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496844911215 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162068200742 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222767087116 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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