The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK

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The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.

The bar chart compares the time spent by 10 to 15-year-olds in the UK on two activities, namely chatting online and playing computer games.
It is clear that playing computer games is marginally more popular than chatting on the Internet. However, different trends can be seen when we look at specific figures for boys and girls.
The boys aged 10 to 15 in the UK favored playing their game consoles over chatting online. Around 85% boys do this activity when the figure for chatting on the Internet is only 55%. Whereas most of boys spend more than one hour every day to play games, only 30% have online conversations daily. Notably, there are nearly 10% of boys playing computer games for four hours or more.
By contrast, the girls prefer chatting on the Internet. Nearly 70% of girls spent time on chatting online, the figure for playing games consoles was just over 50%. While most of girls used more than one hour to chat every day, the amount of time that they spent on gaming was overall less than one hour. Finally, the proportion of girls spent more than 4 hours on chatting online was nearly 10%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the boys') or simply say ''most boys''.
Suggestion: most of the boys; most boys
...ng on the Internet is only 55%. Whereas most of boys spend more than one hour every day to p...
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Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the girls') or simply say ''most girls''.
Suggestion: most of the girls; most girls
...games consoles was just over 50%. While most of girls used more than one hour to chat every d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, look, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64974619289 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23368711743 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553299492386 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.1648779459 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.2727272727 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312274242509 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136567300162 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088387927801 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20561397668 0.15604864568 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077561302509 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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