Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is just as important for older people to study or learn new things as it is for younger people.
Some people think that it is similarly crucial for the elderly to learn new things as it is for the young, while others disagree. For me, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, the elderly and the youth all need to learn how to communicate with each other. Therefore, learning how to communicate is also essential for the elderly. Take my grandmother as an example. My grandmother spent 4 hours per day studying English and Mandarin. That is to say, she often watches many Mandarin movies and memorizes Mandarin characters and words. In addition, she has a small brochure writing English vocabulary, which is quite similar to my TOEFL vocabulary list. Thus, she usually has no problems communicating with her grandchildren. Contrarily, my grandfather is stubborn, and he asserts that every Taiwanese should understand traditional Taiwanese fully. Therefore, he is not motivated to learn Mandarin or English to understand his grandchildren. Eventually, my grandpa’s Mandarin and English-speaking grandchildren usually cannot comprehend a single word that he says. Clearly, learning new skills is likewise essential for the elderly because they also have to talk with others.
Last but not least, old people should care about their health, so learning health-related knowledge is as important as it is for the young. Take my grandmother’s sister, Jane, as an example. Jane took several courses that pertain to old people’s health management. For instance, she learned that consuming Zinc and Iron boosts an elderly person’s metabolism. Jane also knew how to plan her diet carefully to prevent obesity and diabetes. Eventually, she had not gotten any diseases at the age of ninety-five, and she may even have a healthier body than most young people. On the contrary, my grandmother’s little brother, Tom, did not care about his health after he retired. He continued smoking cigarettes and drank alcohol every day. Hence, Tom got hypertension and obesity when he was only fifty-three years old, and he died at the age of 59. So evidently, maintaining one’s health is also crucial for the elderly.
To sum up, I agree that it is essential for old people to acquire new skills and knowledge because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, likewise, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22010869565 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06898160598 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567934782609 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7425350271 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.84 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.72 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236348644596 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069763433486 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943234911243 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200130854977 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112594077462 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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