You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
The charts give information about the amount of males and females who attended four different classes including: drama, painting, sculpture and language at an educational centre for adult in 2009 with the average age of those students. Overall, we can see from the bar graph the number of individual participated in each course, when most of woman chose language class, men preferred painting one. Meanwhile, take a closer look to another chart, there are two groups of age were accounted for two-third in the whole figure.
Looking at details, it is clear that sculpturing not as popular as other types, just 10 members for men and no more than 5 members for woman, however, drama class were significantly higher than three times compare on female students, while just stayed unchanged when it comes to male participants. Moreover, at the same time, the number of course takers in painting class for either men as well as women rose noticeably, approximately 25 students and 30 students respectively, on the other hand, an dramatically growth in women participants to a peak of 40 individuals, although it was also a slightly decline in male members.
In term of making comparison between both genders in studying evening courses, it showed that majority of students were at the age 40 to 49 as well as the age of 50 or above which was calculated for 26% and 42% respectively whereas that figure of the age from 30 to 39 was fewer. Additionally, age group lower than 29 occupied about one-third in total, so as a result, it can be inferred from the pie graph that almost attendees were the elderly.
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- You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participan 78
- Ielts writing part 1 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...udents respectively, on the other hand, an dramatically growth in women participan...
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Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('growth') instead of another adjective.
...udents respectively, on the other hand, an dramatically growth in women participants to a peak of 40 i...
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Line 2, column 591, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decline') instead of another adjective.
...of 40 individuals, although it was also a slightly decline in male members. In term of making com...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ty of students were at the age 40 to 49 as well as the age of 50 or above which was calcul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, so, third, well, whereas, while, of course, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 274.0 196.424390244 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85401459854 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80137959513 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 106.607317073 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638686131387 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 283.868780488 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0609152745 43.030603864 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.0 112.824112599 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.1428571429 22.9334400587 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.2857142857 5.23603664747 330% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210731524144 0.215688989381 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934381783594 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721613183177 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135908113362 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605056429546 0.0819641961636 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 13.2329268293 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.3012195122 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 40.7170731707 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.