Some people marry shortly after finishing college. Others prefer to focus on their careers first and wait until later to get married. Which of these situations do you think is better?
With the rapid development of technology and science, it is difficult that keep a balance between work and life. Some people consider that marrying earlier could be better for development in your life and the future, but others argue that people should focus on their career first. However, as far as I am concerned, keeping your eyes on your own career is the best choice after graduating from college, which could cultivate responsibility in working and mitigate much pressure that perhaps comes from taking care of your children and parents.
Most of the students actually could not recognize their future and build enough responsibility for facing a family. Let us make a simple calculation, if a student starts his/her wonderful college life at 18, he/she will graduate when he/she is 22. Although we are living in a modern society, which is easy to face all kinds of information from social media, it does not represent everyone is modest, Working environment could help people to know how tough your life is and how to keep your mind in a positive attitude and make improvement. For example, the increasing divorce rate in The United States is because a lot of students who have graduated from the university marry so early, but they do not recognize the difference between married life and your single life, just considering that love could resolve everything, however, the lacking responsibility will drop you to the terrible pressure, and it is also not fair to your partner.
Moreover, the fierce competition causes graduated students are difficult to find a suitable job for building a family. Compared to 100 years ago, people have to pay more for sustaining daily life, higher prices and tougher life have become a kind of ‘tag’ for the almost young person, as a normal graduated student who lacks experience and internships, building a family is not a miser choice. According to a recent report from Japan, the marriage rate has decreased by about 20 percent since 2010, and the top 1 factor is the pressure from finding a job.
Consequently, as a student who just graduated from university, you should focus on your career first, because it could help you to modest and give some time to be ready to your next step in your life, defending the overwhelmed pressure from working.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 753, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...the difference between married life and your single life, just considering that love...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94587628866 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68932276905 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564432989691 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.7311871671 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.454545455 100.406767564 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2727272727 20.6045352989 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134160372057 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566468010657 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815103775774 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909252541739 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057731863933 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 11.7677419355 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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