Some people marry shortly after finishing college. Others prefer to focus on their careers first and wait until later to get married. Which of these situations do you think is better?
With the rapid development of the technology and science, it is difficult that keeping a balance between work and life. Some people consider that marry earlier could better for developing in your life and the future, but others argues that people should focus on their career first. However, as far as I am concerned, keeping your eyes on own career is the best choice after graduating from the college, which could cultivate responsibility in working and mitigate much pressure that perhaps comes from taking care of your children and parents.
Most of student actually could not recognize their future and build enough responsibility for facing a family. Let us make a simple calculation, if a student start his/her wonderful college life in 18, he/she will graduate when he/she is 22. Although we are living in a modern society, which is easy to face all kinds of information from social media, it does not represent everyone is modest, Working environment could help people to know how tough in your life and how to keep your mind in positive attitude and make improvement. For example, the increasing divorce rate from The United States is because a lot of students who have graduated from the university marry so early, but they does not recognize the difference between married life and your single life, just considered that love could resolve everything, however, the lacking responsibility will drop you to the terrible pressure, and it is also not fair to your partner.
Moreover, the fierce competition causes graduated students are difficult to find a suitable job for building a family. Compared to 100 years ago, people have to pay more for sustaining daily life, higher prices and tougher life have become a kind of ‘tag’ for almost young person, as a normal graduated student who lacks experience and internships, building a family is not a miser choice. According to the recent report from Japan, the marry rate has decreased about 20 percentages since 2010, and the top 1 factor is the pressure from finding job.
Consequently, as a student just graduated from university, you should focus on your career first, because it could help you to modest and give some time to ready to your next step in your life, defending the overwhelmed pressure from working.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 690, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...the university marry so early, but they does not recognize the difference between ma...
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Line 3, column 749, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...the difference between married life and your single life, just considered that love ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01312335958 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66541345302 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561679790026 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.7977525534 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.636363636 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6363636364 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137526942481 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604852855251 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817569887863 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967738066225 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547440028591 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 11.7677419355 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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