Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to
them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal
responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and
supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge
your position.
Today we live in the world of social media. In this world youth has new role models such as
sports stars, movie stars and young businessmen. Their life is accessible to all the young generation
through social media platforms. These stars are also continuously posting and interacting with their
fans. I
agree with the prompt and in my opinion these stars must set good examples for the young
generation for the following two reasons.
Firstly, today's youth is highly influenced by the sprots and movie stars. They look up to
them and attempt to be like one. The behaviour of these stars directly impacts the behavior of the
society. Lets take a cricketer of an example, in India cricketers are treated like gods. Every Indian
child has a favourate cricketer and they try to do every thing that the crickerter is doing. If the
cricketer is a good person that is he respects elders, try to be fit, focus only on game etc then all
the children who follows that cricketer also try to follow those things. If he is not a good fit for
a society that is he drink and drives, disrespects elders and fans, does not focus on the game etc, then
children who follows that cricketers also become like that cricketer.
Secondly, with the social media the personal life of all stars is easily available to the
general public. Their nature is open to all the young people to follows them. At the young stage,
child can't differentiate between movie and real world and has an assumption that the nature of actor
in the movie is his real nature. Then he tries to follow his real nature disregarding wheather the
nature is good or bad. So, as a role model stars has an obligation to behave in good manners for the
young people who look up to him. For example, if a actor work in compaign againts smoking and smokes
in real world then that send wrong message to the young genration.
In conclusion, I think stars have an obligation to behave as role models because their
behavior has high influence on the young generation.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...y impacts the behavior of the society. Lets take a cricketer of an example, in Indi...
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Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...f all stars is easily available to the general public. Their nature is open to all the young ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 7, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ollows them. At the young stage, child cant differentiate between movie and real wo...
^^^^
Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ple who look up to him. For example, if a actor work in compaign againts smoking ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69359331476 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42085801605 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479108635097 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6267053745 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6842105263 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.97078651685 443% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277118643152 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918310615484 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949250508131 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801860909463 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661453641747 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...y impacts the behavior of the society. Lets take a cricketer of an example, in Indi...
^^^^
Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...f all stars is easily available to the general public. Their nature is open to all the young ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 7, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ollows them. At the young stage, child cant differentiate between movie and real wo...
^^^^
Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ple who look up to him. For example, if a actor work in compaign againts smoking ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69359331476 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42085801605 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479108635097 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6267053745 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6842105263 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.97078651685 443% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277118643152 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918310615484 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949250508131 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801860909463 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661453641747 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.