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a piece of jewelry vs. a concert

When considering a suitable reward, buying a piece of jewelry or having a concert is a reasonable option. On one hand, the outlook of a piece of jewelry, for example, a ruby necklace,
can be attractive to both the wearer and viewers. On the other, a unique satisfaction to one's ears is one of the benefits an audience who listens to a concert can have. As for me, I prefer to get a ticket for a delightful concert, which I will explain as follows.

First, listening to classical music decreases the level of anxiety. Stress can be detrimental especially when accumulated to an extent distracting people's conscientiousness and reducing productivity. These pernicious effects are always neglected by people nowadays who are too busy to care about their mental health. One practical method to address this issue is to indulge oneself in a musical world in which one can unburden the unnecessary nervousness as well as set their mind free from monotonous tasks once in a while. Because of this health benefit I can obtain from classical music, it is satisfying and refreshing for me to stay in a live music show after a long day of work or completing an academic project.

Second, going to a concert provides people with an opportunity to emotionally connect with others. Musical fans from various
countries, age groups, or with different formal education levels, can be inadvertently different in their attitudes or values;
but they can resonate with each other through a touching melody. This is why whenever a concert is over,
most audiences will stand up and applaud for a long time to show their gratitude and satisfaction. After the event ends, some of them also share their moods and exchange thoughts on
the beautifully written music on social media: harmonious expressions and interactions like these make strangers with the same habits feel close or even become friends on the internet.

Third, various musical instruments can be learned how to play by observing the performance of a concert. Nothing can be more
inspirational for musical students to study than directly watching a group of musicians playing the instruments in front of them. Seeing how every move of musicians' hand gestures changes the way the music sound, for instance,
offers music learners a straightforward hint of how to do so by themselves.

Overall, having a concert, as mentioned above, provides more benefits in general than procuring a piece of jewelry, most of which only people in pursuit of aesthetic favor.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, third, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in general, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06009615385 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94375965777 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581730769231 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4633608371 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.823529412 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.53405017921 265% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131326539038 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514732851296 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767603957396 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594415904961 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826832879967 0.0645574589148 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, third, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in general, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments