Young people enjoy life more than old people.
Some people think old people enjoy their life more than young, as they have more time and more money which they accumulated their whole life. However, I disagree with this for the following two reasons.
First of all, Young people have more energy, enthusiasm, and will to pursue everything that they enjoy or that provides them pleasure. For instance, During my university time, me and my friends, we often used to gather and engage in activities that we loved such as hiking, mountaineering, cycling, etc. These are the moments in my life when I had maximum fun and will remember for my whole life. In contrast, these won't be possible when I will grow older as there won't be any such excitement to pursue something new. This madness is the main reason that makes us walk extra miles, spend an extra hour without sleep, and engage in activities even though they are exhausting. As we grow older, this craziness will slowly fade.
Second of all, During our adulthood we are more attracted to the opposite gender which allows us to be in relationships so, there is always someone for us to talk to and share our feelings with. For instance, When I was in my twenties I used to date a girl and we used to go on date and talk to each other all the time and inspire each other to be the best version of ourselves. During that time, I was never bored or lonely and I loved every moment of that time. In contrast, these sorts of feelings and affection didn't exist as we grow older so, we have nothing interesting to engage in except remembering these sorts of beautiful memories of our past. Love is the thing that makes a person do the thing that they will normally never do and enables a person to enjoy their life to the fullest.
In conclusion, I do believe young people enjoy more than old people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...wont be possible when I will grow older as there wont be any such excitement to pu...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
..., these sorts of feelings and affection didnt exist as we grow older so, we have noth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52293577982 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3898921152 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492354740061 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4730858229 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.642857143 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283300130341 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11302848899 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197523894573 0.0737576698707 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305129773984 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.229630690659 0.0645574589148 356% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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