These Day , it is believed that children should not spend a lot of time on using smartphones . Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that children abuse their cellphones .
On the one hand , i am convinced that children should own a smartphone and use it for some purpose . Firstly , Mobile phones have important functions for the development of children . To my mind , students can easily search information and knowledge when have a trouble about homework , therefore they could receive assistance which can help them achieve many good results . Secondly , Parents can comfortably keep in touch with their children . On working-time , The safeness of children often be a nervousness of parents because they away form us. so the connection among us is extremely important. In addition to, the communication between parents and teachers of children would control student which make them be better .
On the other hand , it is understandable why the smartphones addiction have to be stopped.
On top of that , cellphones take so much time and attention of children . In my opinion , smartphones have many types of leisure which make children could focus on it all day . For examples : games or platforms of socialmedia which own many attraction to young people . Accordingly , children easily forget their learning and nervousness about their exercise .Furthermore , many diverse categories of leisure on smartphones make children happy without relationships . What is more dangerous , they don not need make friends so smartphones reduce social communication of young people . Finally , cellphones cause many diseases about eyes such as blindness , low vision which reduce the quality of life of patient. At present , i am suffering low vision due to five years of using smartphones.
In conclusion , there may be some reasons to support children should not spend a lot of time on their smartphones , i strongly believe that this policy is not without drawsbacks and thus should not be implemented by the state.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, what is more, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29906542056 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0051944319 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554517133956 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.811509956 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7222222222 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 47.0 5.01903807615 936% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217279907631 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701839924919 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641087628051 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145594458291 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704061292923 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.