Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In certain nations, regional business are inadequate to keep up with supermarkets. It is argued by some that dissolution of local bustness will lead to disapperance of local Communities. In my opinion, I completely agree that the growth of supermarkets make small shops and business struggles to thrive.
One of the main reasons behind my opinion is that supermarkets offer products and goods at lower prices than small stores , making it hard for locals to compete. In other words, hypermarkets have more resources and financial backing, which allow them to buy products in bulk and provide offers and discounts. Secondly While local stores sell mostly regional goods, Superstores provide a wider variety of products, which make it difficult for local business to attract more Customers. Also, these stores not only provide all the necessary items under one roof, but also stay open for longer hours compared to shops, as making it more convenient for Customers to Shop.
Another reason is that local businesses are usually run by a single owner, with a limited financial budget, which hinder them from
investing in marketing and advertising or to
Keep up with new technologies and innovation , leading to smaller customer base as opposed to super markets and Insufficient revenue to sustain operational Finally, nowadays rather than grocery products, Customers seek
to additional services like online accessibility, banks sture bark, and pharmacy ,which local businesses are unable to offer.Hence
all these factors lead to the closure of such business, causing loss of support for the local community.
In Conclusion, I reiterate that the growth of supermarkets led to several megative consequences for the local markets.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45387453875 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88850542984 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627306273063 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 161.221035297 49.4020404114 326% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.222222222 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1111111111 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5555555556 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23643236108 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106156603644 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776033372344 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105968195471 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822896022438 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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