Technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
With the development of information technology, it is possible for children to spend their free time surfing the internet and doing other activities on mobile devices. While there are several advantages and also disadvantages in this situation, I do believe that the drawbacks are more outweighed the benefits.
To begin with, technologies and mobile devices create many opportunities for children to develop their awareness of the world around them. By using their free time to surf the internet, children can go to websites that contain knowledge they are not taught at school, such as Wikipedia. In this way, their hard skills and soft skills may be improved a lot. Moreover, teenagers who spend a long day at school have more methods to relax and entertain. There are several video clips or games on the internet that not only can help kids to entertain themselves but also learn more things about actual life. Hence, technology can be considered as a way for children to keep themselves in whenever they have leisure time.
In contrast, the Internet includes abundant disadvantages that children cannot aware of. It is no matter whether the reasons for using technology are good or not, it brings the kids isolation. By spending time using mobile phones, even in their free time, children can be dependent on it. Day by day, they will see their smart devices as the sole friend they have. Lost connection to the real world is not a good way that parents should let their children in. Furthermore, time-consuming is the next problem that parents ought to consider in this case. Instead of taking an hour on the internet to communicate with virtual friends, teenagers can hang out with real friends and maintain the relationship between them. So, technologies contain many drawbacks that children must think carefully about before determining to keep themselves in.
In conclusion, although there are benefits that technologies bring to children’s lives, it also consists of disadvantages that need to be taken considerably. In some situations, the drawbacks outweigh the benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kids'' or 'kid's'?
Suggestion: kids'; kid's
...chnology are good or not, it brings the kids isolation. By spending time using mobil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, while, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15294117647 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84620794286 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.846968608 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368208977978 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106404984476 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687169587312 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227568493344 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594880744488 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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